Revising the 1Report assignment

What I need to do to revise my paper is talk more about the article.  I need to also state my article in my introduction paragraph.  I did not do this in my first paper and that is one of the reasons that I need to redo it.  Also I need to use more quotes from my article and put them into my paper.  I did not have any quotes or citations in my first draft and I definitely need to put them in the final.  Another thing that I need to do with the article is summarize it better.  I did not do such a good job at that the first time I wrote more of a biography then a report.

Speaking of the report I need to do my source section better.  I did not really understand that part of the paper at first.  Now I feel like I understand what I need to do in that section.  Going to the chryst writing center really helped me with my paper and understanding it better.  In the section about sources I now know that I need to talk more about what life would be like for a person back in 1893.  Also what would life be like back then for Holmes, and why it was easy for him to murder all those people without anyone finding out? 

In the section about linking him to serial killers now and in his time I definitely need to improve on.  I did not have that in my first draft and will definitely need to add that to my final copy.  Besides all that I just need to simplify my ideas and not be all over the place in the final copy of my paper about Holmes.  I also need to keep in mind that it is not a biography it is a report.       

They Say/ I Say--response 1

According to David Zinczenko’s “Don’t Blame the Eater” there are no alternatives to inexpensive fast food restaurants.  But I have to say that there are alternatives that aren’t that expensive and are better for you then fast food restaurants.  An example of one is Subway it is a sandwich shop that prides itself on being better than any fast food restaurant.  They show you on every napkin their foods calorie intake compared to that of McDonald’s and Burger King’s calorie intake.  You can also make yourself your own food that would have fewer calories than any fast food restaurant.  You can also opt for more vegetables and fruits when you go out.

Is being overweight a genuine medical problem rather than a problem of cultural stereotypes.  I think it all depends on the case that you are dealing with.  In some cases it is a medical problem that they can’t help that they gain weight and that it is also hereditary.  But then there are the cases that are stereotypical.  Because the person eats so unhealthy that they become overweight then do not want to take responsibility for it.  So instead they blame the fast food industry that they are the reasons that they are overweight.  Instead of blaming the fast food industry they should be the ones saying I eat here to frequently and maybe I should cut back on it and go for something that is healthier for me.

Even though these two topics are from the same article they are very different in their response.  One talks about eating healthier and the other talks about people who are overweight and if it’s a problem or stereotypical.  Although they are different they do have some similarities.  Like for instance they both have fast food as their main topic also they both have a strong opinion with them.      

#1 blog post

My topic is about crime and punishment and the person that I am focusing on is Dr. Henry Howard Holmes or H.H. Holmes.  He was one of the first documented serial killers in Chicago in 1893.  H.H. Holmes also went by many aliases which is one of the reasons he wasn’t caught right away. He also opened up a hotel which he designed and built with the idea of using it for murdering people.  When he was caught he confessed to twenty seven murders but the body count could be as high as two hundred bodies.  In its time this case was notorious because it received so much publicity from the newspapers.

I choose the topic of crime and punishment because it was the topic that drew my attention the most.  I was fascinated and intrigued with the idea of serial killers.  I wanted to be able to get inside their head and see why they decide to kill people.  Also what makes them want to keep on killing more people after the first one.   Another reason why I choose this topic was to see what the punishment was for serial killers in the 1800’s compared to the punishment of serial killers now days.  I also want to look at how his life style was as a serial killer in the 1800’s.

To locate information on my topic I started with goggling H.H. Holmes then I read some of the articles that showed up.  Then I went on to the library search site to find some more articles on H.H. Holmes and at that site I could also get my sources in mla format.  The library site is a very good site and I have found a lot of interesting information from it so far that will help with writing my paper.