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Dear Group members,
Please review my presentation and use the critique sheet Dr. Archibald has provided to give me feedback so that I can improve the presentation.

Conference Notes

When I went into my conference with Dr. Archibald I went in with the idea that I was going to talk about how criminals have out smarted the police over the years.  Now coming out of my conference I realized with the help of Dr. Archibald that I need to change my thesis because I am not getting my point across that I want.  So during the conference I changed my thesis to a two prong idea to look at how criminals are perceived and how they are prosecuted.  I am then going to use this and look at how the media influences this.  So now I have to go back and look for more information pertaining to the evidence that media plays on criminals.  After doing this change I think that my paper is going to be better than ever and I am excited to finish writing it

Sources for the 3resProj

After learning about the new way to search for sources on google it has made the process so much easier.  The sources that I found that I will be using for my paper are all under four different caategories and those are technology, media, Tv shows/movies, and past stories.  The first thing mthat I did was search for atleast two good sources for each category and one so so source for each category.  Then I started my apper and worked in my good sources that I knew I could do something with and I saved my so so sources for later to go back in and work with if I still needed them.  Some sources are more important than others because some of greater information and are more useful throughout the paper than others.

Conference notes

When I went in to my conference I knew that I wanted to do my research paper on criminals and law and what role technology plays on that.  Dr. Archibald had some great ideas to help out my topic and make it more concise.  He said that I should see how the criminal has progressed so far that they have out maneuvered the police officers over the years.  He said that I should also look at how TV shows, like CSI, have played a role in this as well.  I now plan to go back and reword my thesis to have it cater about what we talked about and the new ideas that we discussed.

ResProj paper ideas

"focus on the fact that these men were everyday normal people that you wouldn’t expect to be reading about as serial killers and they got away with a lot of their crimes  because of their charm and good looks."

 -For this quote I can evaluate and look at why charming and good looking people get away with so much more than others and if this is a big factor when looking at serial killers.

"The way that we deal with serial killers has also changed.  Back in the 19th century they didn’t have the technology that we have today so it was harder for them to catch them.  Like all the different DNA equipment that they have in labs that can cut down on time and find the person faster."

-For this quote I can examine why this advancement made such a big impact and how it has helped us today.

 After reading these quotes from my 2Syn paper what do you think about these topic ideas? Do you understand what I am getting at? Which one sounds best to use for the 3ResProj? Why?

integrating sources

Example #1:
Serial killers from different centuries can be similar in many ways as H.H. Holmes illustrates in the 19th century:

Holmes and Ted Bundy are the two serial killers that can be linked together.  H.H. Holmes is from the 19th century and Bundy is from the 20th.  They both have common links between them like "having no motive when killing his victims."(Chicago Tribune)

Even though these guys are from different times they still have similarities when it comes to being serial killers.  This is why the idea of the serial killer hasn’t changed over time.

Example #2:

As People magazine points out " he was a son any mother would be proud to call her own.”  This is one of the reasons why it was so easy for both Bundy and Holmes to get victims because of their charm. 

Work Cited

 “The Chicago Tribune.” Fold3. 18 Aug. 1895. Library Resources. Web. 17 Sep. 2011

McCall, Cheryl. "Did he kill 18 women? Or has he been framed?" People 7 Jan. 1980.

First paragraph of my 2Syn paper

You might think of a serial killer as a lot of things crazy, disturbing maybe even horrifying, but you would never say innocent about one would you?  That is what happened when it came to serial killer Ted Bundy.  Up until the day that he was executed friends, family, and strangers all around the world thought of Ted Bundy as an innocent man not a serial killer.   An example of people believing he is innocent is the article done in People magazine that asks questions that got people thinking did he really kill all those women?

After reading this first paragraph what do you think my paper is about?